Meeting My Baby
The whole pregnancy, I had dreams of how beautiful my baby would be. I imagined beautiful eyes and a button nose. Soft fuzz of hair I could brush back and pin. I secretly hoped for a little girl.
When I heard the news that the baby would be a little girl, I became increasingly excited. I prepped my house for a little one. I even picked out her name. Rosie. A sweet little princess I’d dote on and cater to. I would dress her up every day and take her for strolls. Everyone would be jealous of how perfect we were.
Rosie’s father wasn’t a very nice man. He was always drinking and smoking dirty cigarettes. He’d yell and leave almost every night to get pissed and gamble money away. He was not fit to be a parent. I loosened his brakes for Rosie’s future. The smoking and stress couldn’t be good for her development. She didn’t need a man like that in her life anyways. I was all she’d need in the end.
In the 9th month of pregnancy, I was sure that Rosie was getting close to being ready to be born. I was ready to meet my little girl. I knocked on the Johnson’s door, a fake smile plastered on my face.
The young widow living there answered, her stomach full and stretched with beautiful Rosie. Mrs. Johnson had been running a pregnancy blog I had been reading for these few long months and it was finally time for me to make my move.
“Yes? Can I help you?”
"I'm Stacy! We hooked up on the Mom site, remember? I'm here to give you these baby toys you wanted!" Her face seemed to light up at this.
She looked around the corner, as if trying to look for any danger. I gave her a reassuring smile. She sighed and let me inside.
“Thank you for coming. It’s going to be hard raising this little one all on my own. My husband died in a tragic car accident not too long ago.” I nodded along to her story like I hadn’t known. Moving into her home, I slowly slide the scissors from my coat pocket.
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Thanks! I appreciate that:)
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Idk/: it as nice too
Oh FUCK
You definitely got me
Ohhhhh man I didn't see it at all
Ahhhhh yay! Glad I could come up with something unexpected hahaha
Your writing is so good! Love a good plot twist that I don’t see coming :)
Thank you! That means a lot to me:)
I read through your post history and all of your stories are really good. Keep it up!
This is terrifying.. Mostly because these things really happen.
http://abcnews.go.com/GMA/Health/story?id=495623&page=1
I watched the movie Inside about a year ago and that will fucking terrify you. This stuff happens so much and that's the real horror honestly.
That movie was the only reason why I expected the ending and why I love your story so much!! Great job! Your misdirection is amazing!
Thank you so much! I very much appreciate it<33
I picked up that something wasn't quite right in the paragraph about Rosie's father. But it was very well written. Good job!
Thank you!
I remember a true story similar to this, but involved baby clothes. Great job telling it from this view!
Thank you! I've heard of it happening before but like I never grasped how people could do it. So I tried to write how I thought it would be.
Yes, where the woman lured the pregnant mother into the basement?
Very good, I didn't see that coming!
Yay! Thank you<3
Very well done. For clarity, I think you'd want to loosen brakes, not breaks.
Oh oops. My autocorrect didn't catch that. Thanks!
No problem. I point it out only because I like the story so much.
No I totally appreciate it! I hate mistakes and appreciate when people can point them out(((:
I'm so flattered you think so(: thank you so much!
Not gonna lie, I guessed it from the title (only because I once wrote something in a similar vein). That doesn't mean I didn't enjoy every bit of it, though! Good job!
Well I take that as a win! Thank you:)
Can someone explain the story to me? I feel like I might've missed it.
My idea is that the whole time the reader is supposed to think the narrator is the actual mom and then you find out it's a stranger that wants to take the baby?
The woman is stalking another one and hopes to take the baby from her.
Ahh okay that's how I interpreted. Great read thanks for writing this!
Didn't see that coming whatsoever. Also, yikes. You can really see the crazed enthusiasm on her face and the mother's complete obliviousness to it.
I just subscribed to a bunch of pregnancy subreddits today. Glad I checked which subreddit I was in before proceeding...
Great stuff!!!
Oh my god that's crazy. I'm glad I didn't freak you out lmao. Thank you!!!
Entertaining story with a good ending!
When you wrote “smoking dirty cigarettes” I imagined the guy dropping his cigarettes on dirt then picking them up and smoking them lol. My brain works funny.
Lol! I wrote it thinking of one of those always grouchy and overprotective people who think everything is dirty.
Putting plastic over couches type shit huh.
Exactly
Really good, I've been having this nightmare through my first and current pregnancy (don't let pregnant women read news articles about this, looking a baby, ect.)
I still have chills and feel nauseated. That doesn't happen often with stories and I like it.
Ahhh I'm so sorry! I hope I didn't upset you or anything): good luck with your pregnancy!
Don't worry it didn't! If it was on like abc.com and I knew it was real if be in tears but I LOVE creepy/horror/thriller so I meant being disturbed as a compliment.
Didn't expect the twist coming either which is hard to do anymore it seems.
Well I very much appreciate that. I know how scary this actually is.
Holy shit, the way this came together. Well done!
Aw thank you!<3
BOOM! Epic plot twist!
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Thank you so much!<3
Twisted but great!
Thank you(((:
There was a murder in my city last month where a woman cut out the unborn child of a womans stomach, this creeps me out. Baby survived, murderers arrested.
Yikes that is fucked up.
This was very well done. When the rug is pulled out, the reader is so invested that it's like a punch in the gut. You have a lot of promise as a writer. Very, very well done.
Honestly one of the sweetest comments I've ever gotten. It means so much to me. I have my degree in English/creative writing so I'm really hoping to take it farther in the future.
As someone struggling to land a literary agent right now, believe me when I say that I know how important honest encouragement is. You got talent. Keep working at it and don't give up!
That was awesome!!!! Considering I just found this sub and that's the first post I have read that really got me. Nice Work!!!
Glad it could be a good first!!
I saw it coming from the beginning, however the story was so well written that it had me questioning my own conclusions in the middle. Also, nice allusion to "loosening his breaks." At least I assumed that was a figure of speech rather than a factual statement.
Aw well thank you! I know it can't be like a shock to everyone but at least it had your attention (:
Had to save it, so I can reread it. Very well done!
Thank you!<3
I clicked this title REALLY hoping it was not about some kind of sad baby murder...but I was not prepared FOR THIS. Well done, OP!! I cannot wait to read more from you :)
Well thank you! No baby murder. Cant speak for the mom tho:/
"Oh yeah...you said earlier you needed a hand making baby clothes for Rosie? I brought my own scissors."
"lol who's Rosie?"
"Uh..you did posted that you're naming your daughter Rosie, right? I mean, we did talk over the net..you even told me where your husband might be so we can both loosen his brakes?"
I really really wish I didn't predict the twist so early here, it was so beautifully written. Not that it was obvious, I read too many of these stories and have quite good at predicting twists. Also I'm really humble about it and have sweg.
Well I'm sorry the twist couldn't be shocking for you. But I'm glad you enjoyed it regardless(:
You've nothing to be sorry for it was an excellent story, hope you realised I was mostly insulting myself there hehe. Hope to see more from you in the future!
Thank you! I appreciate your support<3
"When I heard the news that the baby would be a little girl..."
-I've read waaaay too many plot twist stories to know that that part alone tells enough that the baby isn't hers to begin with. Yep, I'm not fun at parties.
oh man i missed that completely
Oh yeah .. “THE baby” not “my baby”...👏
lol it's okay! Thanks for reading it anyway((:
i somehow expected another baby demon story but this is refreshing
Thank you!!
anytime c:
Jawdropper. I didn’t expect that ending
Aw thank you!!!(:
Reminds me of the Inside movie. Creepy!!
That movie was really hard for me to sit through honestly. Thank you!
I thought it was a surrogate at first but JESUS CHRIST the scissors got me
Thank you!<3
Wow this is fucked up - great job!
Thank you!<3
Sadly I did figure it out in the first paragraph , but only because it reminded me of something similar I saw in the news about a woman faking her pregnancy and then cutting the baby out of the mom with a kitchen knife. Either way it was nicely written and executed. 👌
Now that was weird
Thanks!!!